You are sitting there right now, exactly as I was just two weeks ago.
You are reading through these articles, daring yourself to feel fear.
You are laughing at posts that seem fake to you, brushing off the slight tingle you feel racing down your spine.
You are looking around the room, searching but not seeing.
You are starting to feel that knot of fear in your stomach, you are wishing you hadn’t started reading this post.
You are feeling the sensation of warm breath on the back of your neck, you are feeling it and yet you won’t turn around.
You are telling yourself this post doesn’t scare you, you’ll keep reading to prove that to yourself.
You are starting to wonder why you’re getting so scared in the first place, none of this is real…is it?
If you pay attention, listen really well, you might even be able to hear my eyes blink. Just once.
Don’t turn around.
If you close your eyes, see with your mind, you might even be able to see me move to stand in front of you.
Don’t be alarmed, I don’t want much from you. I’ll only take what I need because I know you want to give it to me.
You are wondering what I want from you. You’ll know soon enough…
Don’t be afraid, it won’t hurt very much,
Don’t be afraid, you won’t even feel my touch.
You must not scream, I feed on your silence,
You must not scream, I don’t want to resort to violence.
I just want your eyes, do you really need to see?
I just want your eyes, I need the darkness to leave me.
By now you know, this darkness consumes,
By now you know, in blindness it looms.
I am, death,
I am, Eldreth.
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Nice short one, don’t know why it was rated so low.
Kinda boring…
I don’t like Doris like this. It was written very well but not my cup of tea
I am? No, I’m not.
It was creepy cause I felt it in my stomache
Hello eldreth!
Um….
Currently sitting in a very brightly lit lab room.
Not ideal setting for a Creepy Pasta, but even in a dark bedroom with nothing to do this wastes my time.
“If you close your eyes you might see me move in front of you.” First of all, I’m sitting right in front of a computer, SECOND of all, how can I continue reading this post if my eyes are closed?
I was in a room full of people. Good concept, but not so scary.
Doesn’t turn around, remembers that I am sitting on a SOFA against a wall.
This WASN’T very creepy but WAS written quite well, so I’m not sure if this should be badly received on Creepypasta or well received on Crappypasta.
Needs more sauce.
Like Spagghetti Bolognese!
One part creeped me out…
“you are wishing you hadn’t started reading this post.”
How did you know? That was totally true!
// sarcastic mode off
Bad, overused cliche
im behind you
feels behind me…. touches wall
Don’t you see?! ELDRETH IS THE WALL!!
“you might even be able to hear my eyes blink”
This right here, is where I gave up. I didn’t stop reading, I just stopped giving a crap.
What are you made of that I could hear you blink, metal? Wood? Cheesy sound effects? Ugh.
I wasn’t scared I’m laying in my bed listing to hangman’s body count by volbeat so I don’t care About your blinking. And it wasn’t the best but its better then a few.
THE FUCK ELDRETH.I THOUGHT SLENDY LOCKED YOU UP!!>:(
You presume to much….oh and your poem sucked lol
Im in the bed. Sue me.
wat? this is supposed to be a private room!
for your information, i have at least 10 times shat some bricks
sadly, i broke my spine last week
i see auntie watching tv with mommy
crap! my stomachache has just getting worse!
shaddap, i know it was you, sis!
actually, this does scare me. i just realized that i haven’t work on my artwork
yes totally, the teacher gonna fucking kill me
auntie is farting. cool.
what now, mommy?!
all i see is dark.. is it bad?
i will never give you my fortune!!
like i said, hell, i will never give you money!
just like the dentist said, before he took my beloved teeth
i have watch enough porn. wtf.
i know where is it going!!
im a pervert, not a masochist
i need to see those young ladies
i get it!! you are blind!!
consumes what? some cereal?
looms in what, old blind man?
so you are death..? interesting
nice to meet you, eldreth!!
oh shit, what have i done.. totally shat some bri
I am sitting here eating pizza bites while my wife plays Xbox. Do I sound scared? Just for the record, my back is against a wall.
I thought it was awesome…then the rhyming started, and I lost my shit completely. XD
It kinda had me going but the last two lines killed it.
it was good until I realized I was in a car
I did none of these things.
Kind of creepy. Made me look back, twice. Haha..
I would wonder why anyone would be breathing down my neck right now, considering I’m on the can.
Didn’t even know it was a poem. You go from unrhymed to rhymed style…and cheesy rhymes at that. It was not creepy. The poetry was mediocre. It tried too hard. Sorry. I still can’t figure out how to rate with zero stars.
Very sub-par. Don’t see why it deserved to be put on Creepypasta. Its not creepy, Its not original, and its not well written.
I can agree with not creepy and not original but I wouldn’t go as far as to say it’s badly written. It’s actually quite well-written by comparison to quite a number of pieces I’ve seen, it’s the execution of it that was the problem, for me anyway.
Cool!
I hate when pastas tell me I’m scared, when literally nothing has happened. If I’m not already scared you can’t change that by saying I am.
DAMMIT ELDRETH! I HATE WHEN I TURN AROUND AND YOU KILL ME!
So, you are behind me ? Jokes on you I just farted bitch.
lame cliche shit.
I did not like this Sam I am.
It started descending into blandness, especially if the reader didn’t even have space behind to turn around.
Lol Ikr. I’m reading this on my iPod lying down on my bed.
I didn’t even have space for Eldreth to stand in front of me.
a nice poetic story but I didn’t find it creepy.