07Dec,12

Guests In Our Home

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I love how my Grandfather is always around to keep me company. On days that my Mom isn’t around, Grandpa is always nearby to comfort me. I sit on his lap, tell him stories about my day, and I never feel like I’m alone. Although our house is never empty even when Mom leaves for work, and I sit with Grandpa and read stories while he enjoys his chair, we always have guests in every room of our house.

There’s Edna and Elma the twins my Grandfather is friends with, they’re always sitting together in the kitchen with a teapot between just the two of them. There is also Joseph the plumber who went to school with Dad. Often seated with him in his study as dad is hunched over his desk, with a grin on his face, always looking at their High school yearbook while Joseph keeps him company as old friends should. Unless Mom needs to use a spare chair, then Joseph just stands next to Dad as he looks at his yearbook.

Then we have our younger guests like Beth and Tomas, who are around my age. Often upstairs when they aren’t playing with me. However I don’t really care if Tomas stays up there with his Mom and Dad, he never talks to me, and always makes a stupid face at me when I try and play with him. But Beth is really nice, she has pretty blonde curls in her hair, wears pretty perfumes and makeup, and sometimes Mom buys new dresses for her to wear. I’m sure she likes those, because she always has a smile on her face, even when I accidentally asked Mom how she got the ugly scar on her back. I felt bad when Mom told me that she had gotten the scar when she came here and was separated from her parents, who Mom says were very bad people. So I guess that makes her like the sister I never had, but I just like playing games with her when I’m bored. But Mom often scolds me if I get Beth’s dresses dirty, or accidentally knock her down.

Tonight my Mom says we’ll be having another guest, and a new friend for me to play with! Hopefully his family can come too! But Mom says that it’s hard to get an entire family like Tomas’ to come and stay in our home. So before she leaves for work, she tells me she’ll be home by Midnight. She gives me a kiss on the cheek, packs up her tools, and tells me to go make some space in Beth’s room for the new boy to stay. It’s the last time I talk to Mom before she leaves for work, and I go upstairs to get the bedroom ready. It takes me awhile, and by the time I’m done I don’t want to play with Beth like I usually do. So I grab a storybook from Beth’s shelf, and go downstairs to the living room. As always Grandpa is there, sitting in his rocking chair, waiting for me to come sit in his lap and tell him how my day went.

So I climb up into his lap, and snuggle against him as I tell him about our new guest. But I notice something’s wrong. His head is limp to one side, and his eye’s are closed. So I hop off his lap, and go into the kitchen as fast as I can. I run past  Edna and Elma, and immediately go for the bottom drawer next to the silverware where we keep Grandfather’s emergency supplies. I go back into the living room, stopping at the doorway to remember my manners, and I say “Good evening” to Edna and Elma before I go back to Grandpa. Carrying the supplies in my arms, I drop them behind Grandpa’s chair and look up at his neck. “Grandpa, your stitches came out again! It’ll take me forever to fix your neck like last time!…hmph…if only Mom had sewn you shut with a machine and used beads to stuff you like she did to Beth, instead of that flimsy cotton. Then you wouldn’t be falling apart all the time!”.

But I’m not upset with him, it’s not his fault. Mommy was only learning when she first brought him over as a guest. We’d only just moved into the neighborhood, and she had wanted to make sure that we’d never have to be lonely ever again. But of course now our guests can sit straight and never fall over, and Mom says that someday she’ll be sitting next to Grandfather while I’m out bringing new guests to keep us company.

Credit To: SteewpidZombie

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  • Lolwat?

    Creepy and all around unsettling, well done.

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    Rating: +17 (from 23 votes)
  • Zach

    I could feel something was up, but thought it was just a foster home….. was not expecting that ending.

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    Rating: +39 (from 39 votes)
    • Emma

      I thought it was a foster home for a little too.

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      Rating: +18 (from 20 votes)
  • Anonymous

    Hmm, reminds me a bit of Paranorman…which stank. This was just okay.

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    • TheIntimateAvenger

      How does a murderous woman remind you of a child who can see ghosts? These stories have nothing in common.

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  • Tardigrade

    Fantastic — best pasta in a while!

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    Rating: +6 (from 12 votes)
  • Cynnical Person

    So I’m assuming either the mom makes taxidermy of people she kills and the son plays with them, or she robs graves and make the corpses into taxiddemy?

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    • http://Yahoo Anonymous

      Maybe his mother some how saves them from their near death/bring them back to life for her family to be happy and be with their friends/family together

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      Rating: -6 (from 12 votes)
    • Boomer

      Her mom could practice necromancy or voodoo or something like that, like when he said that mom was “still learning”

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      • TheIntimateAvenger

        What are you two talking about? She obviously stuffs their corpses then plays with them like dolls.

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        Rating: +2 (from 4 votes)
  • WhatisthisWinter

    Well I’m never sleeping again.

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    • Mark

      You’re not the only one brother.

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  • An Indian

    Wow! So many stuffed dead bodies! Yuk…

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  • Alice

    Nicely done!! There weren’t any typos that I saw, so I thank you for that! The plot was flawlessly executed. I never expected the ending. Please continue to make these yummy pastas!

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    • watashinomori

      I never expected that too… I was thinking something like The Others, or anything about ghosts… that ending surprised me a lot.

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  • AssHat

    Saw it coming from five miles off.

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    • TheIntimateAvenger

      Me too. Don’t see why everyone else seems to have trouble guessing the end.

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  • TheRadHatter

    I was thinking they were ghosts. Sheesh. That was pretty good. :)

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    • Anonymous

      So did i

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  • Jason

    Sweet mercy that was creepy!

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  • don’t look behind you.

    I don’t get it….

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    • KiwiDaFuzzy

      the mom kills people and turns them into dolls for her son.

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      Rating: +9 (from 9 votes)
  • meh

    At first I thought it was just another predictable story. But it wasn’t what I expected at all. Nicely done.

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  • Anonymous

    Amazing! Not in least what I expected. had to reread it twice ! So good congrats !

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  • thatgirl

    I thought it was going to be a schizoprenia story. Pleasantly surprised! Delicious pasta.

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  • http://rottenmindset.blogspot.com SteewpidZombie

    Thanks for the comments and ratings. This is the first of two short stories I’ve submitted to CreepyPasta, and it’s good to see people enjoying it. Or heckling it for it’s flaws. I’ll be submitting more stories in the future, and hopefully they’ll be even more creepy.

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    • Smokeduck

      Delicious pasta dude!

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  • KiwiDaFuzzy

    that was really good! at first i thought it was a foster home then when i found out what it really was i was like O.O

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  • anonymous

    I was so surprised that I read it twice. Well done!

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  • Anonymous

    that sucked

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  • Wow

    I read it twice. Thought they were ghosts at first. Very creepy, love it! Keep writing :)

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  • http://www.Mikes-revenge.net FrozenShaddow

    I thought it was some sort of…refugee house. I was not expecting that ending. This was a well-executed story, I enjoyed it very much. The end freaked me out. Well done!

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  • http://CREPPYPASTA.com maze rage mage

    twist ending not totally saw it coming demestic doll is creppy though thats why i hate clowns and dolls

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  • Dan

    The child’s innocence is unsettling…damn it…goosebumps.

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  • Jackson

    I thought it was going to end up like doors, where she ends up being a dog or something and something bad happens, until she had to make room for the new person.

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  • DJ

    Wow, I was not expecting that at all. I thought it was maybe like a foster home or something! Very creepy twist, loved it! 10/10

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