Focus
Did you ever see one of those videos where you are asked to look for, or follow a specific thing through out the video? Then, at the end, they reveal that as were watching, something large and intrusive moved around in plain sight and you never even noticed it. Its frightening how often that happens, like how I just moved from the doorway into your room as you read this.
Auurgh…
Good thing I’m not in my room right now… But then again, now I’ll be to freaked out to open my door…
D:
haha nice and short and creepy. I like it!
I AM RIGHT BEHIND YOU AND IT IS CREEPY. BEWARE.
Okay, I really liked this. REALLY liked it. Short, sweet, and creepy. You kind of get a feel of where it’s going halfway through, but you’re reading too fast to think your hypothesis through and you’ve read the ending and are freaked out before you can prepare yourself for it.
OMNOMNOM DELICIOUS.
Eh. Okay.
Mother fucker. I was reading this, waiting for something lame to happen, but nope, you decided to make me shit brix. Cool story bro.
FUUUUUUUUUUUUUUU-
That’s cool.
I can’t say I’ve experienced that
OH SHI-
0_0 Wow that was good
Too bad im not in my room though bitch
OSHI
Short and sweet. Good pasta.
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Nay! *Looks behind*
My brother is behind me on his bed so I won’t be fooled!
Help…
Are you my cat?
Because he just did that.
This was awesome…even though I am in plain view of my door right now. Still, it could be a ghosty and things! Haha.
SHIT
Well if your in my room why don’t I get you something to drink, a host does have to be kind to their guest?
Other then that great pasta
Glad to see moar real creepypastas. Win.
yes but did you see the moonwalking bear?
Even if I was in my room, this is so far from believable for me that it would never scare me. Maybe I’ve just been reading so many pastas that I am scare-proof now.
This actually really creeped me out.
Mainly because earlier today, I was at a lecture about attention and focus and we watched one of those videos. Then I get home and read this. Oh poo, they’re watching me.
Would have been scarier if I wasn’t on a computer at my school. :\
This is an amazing story, especially because I’ve seen videos like that (e.g. moonwalking bear) and as any slightly-paranoid creepypasta reader, I always seem to see things at the corners of my eyes after reading things like this (drives my friends crazy)
Thank you
Awesome.
I’m not in my room right now, so fah. But still gave me the chills.
Sooooo….. Whatcha’ doin’ in my room…while I’m at school…? LOL
BUT WHO WAS SPECIFIC THING??
I’m in town using the internet on my phone
I believe this would have been creepier had I not been in the computer lab with people talking around me as I read it. Nice story though.
hm, a shiver down my spine. Too bad I’m not in my room right now, and I can see all the doors in perfect view.
ooo my door is closed and im facing it. i think i would have noticed. soooo not so creepy right now. but! great way of trying to get there, seriously. good good.
D: I kind of just started yelling at the end.
wack
Sorry. I’m laying on my bed and my door is in plain sight in front of me….
oh my goooooooooooooood
it was eh
This is great. You walked into my room, I`m in the bathroom. I shat bricks, I`m on the shitcan! Are you gonna hand me a Pepsi Throwback when I get thirsty too? (Please? I`m too poor to buy one.)
That was pretty good. Especially since I’m always seeing weird things out of the corner of my eye and my back is to the door. 0.0
Great idea for a pasta, but not the best ending
Haha it was alright, made me laugh for some reason (:
Woulda been better if I actually had been in my room though.
Hehe, I see wut u did there.
OMNOMNOM!!!
Deelishus pasta!!!
Joke’s on you; I’m outside ;D
My wife walked in just as I finished reading this and scared the shit out of me…Very good pasta!
you know what’s MAD SPOOKY? As I was reading this I’m sitting in my dark room and out of the corner of my eye in front of my door I sensed movement. It was nothing btw, but that was creepy, it’s like the story was talking about my visual hallucination! bricks were shat.
HAHAHAi’mtinglynow.
i probably would have liked this pasta… the problem being is that the only time iv seen a video like that was on the jewtube and every time they have one of those its already designed to scare you (constant fail to anyone that watched the first grudge)
Goooood pasta. Short and sweet. Totally true, too. One of the scariest - true - theories I’ve ever heard, honestly. First heard it in Legend of Hell House - old, but pretty good horror -.
Focus your attention on something, and someone could move right amonst you…and you would never know.
this one sent a shiver down my spine until i turned around and stephen colbert was on my tv
oh, colbert, your visage never ceases to comfort me
That hardcore made my insides flip.
Wasn’t all that creepy. :/ At least you got straight to the point and didn’t make some huge story about nothing, and lead all the way up to this. Most of the crap on this website would be ten times better if they did this.
Look, I’m not saying I can do better, but I didn’t find it that creepy.
This would probably work better if I was in a room.
“they reveal that as were watching”
Inept grammar demon.
Fuck… fuck fuck fuck fuck fuck fuck.
No, seriously… I’m scared shitless.
Daaaamn, that was good. O_O
brix were shat.
I actually liked this. You’re just reading too fast, thinking, “What the hell lame story is this bitch gonna try to pull?”, and since you aren’t really thinking about it, you get to the end before your brain fully gets it, and when it does a few miliseconds later, it’s like “OSHIT”
I liek.
Decent.
So you teleported from my living room doorway into my room? That /is/ frightening. But I jest, Author. You must be tired of smart-aleck remarks by now, eh?
Really well done, didn’t affect me though, because I’m laying down, facing the doorway.
Oh my god, my heart just jumped into my throat as I read that. Well done!
If it went into a little more detail about those shows before revealing that they were coming into my room, brix might’ve been shat.
Whut…
FFFFFUUUU
okay, yes, finally a pasta that freaked me out.
LOOK AT ME I HAVE A FUCKING SPEAR!
Please tell me I’m not the only one that jumped and looked round like ‘SHIIIIT’
COOL STORY BRO.
All the people that say they’re facing their doors… That’s the point, you didn’t even notice the door opening and some one coming in because your focused on something else.
DON’T TAKE MY LUNCH MONEY SPARTAN
I actually turned around to check you weren’t in here, well done
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FFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFU-
OMFG, YOU’RE MY MOTHER!!!!
gotta say, this one just didn’t do anything for me.
it was far too vague.
the narrator could be a giant pink fuzzy bear for all i know.
i’d just adore that entering my room and surprising me.
motherfucker ‘m in a darkened room with the only way in happinging to be at the coner of my sight line, needless to say brix where shat
Creepy, but too bad I’m at school reading this.
I’d probably get chills If I read this at home in the middle of the night.
Look behind you! A three-headed monkey!
shivers up and down my spine…
uh
wow
I just lost all feeling in my toes
Wow, your story made me look right into the door searching for something strange O_O
Nice one
Shat brix*
Meh
Doesn’t affect me since I can see my door without shifting my eyes from my computer.
But, I’m right by my door.
I’d feel you.
Besides. It’s day.
This would be scary at night, if I didn’t share my room with my sister, and if I wasn’t. Right by my door.
I’ve never watched a video like that but scary anyway.
Officer NOOOOOOO!!!
omg.
this really scared the
eff you see kay
out of me. lol.
really good pasta(:
Yay, company!
EEeeeeew you’re my sister!!!! Creepy. that’s what i call creepy pasta…jk
its good but not that much of awesome creepy pasta material
Ha, I have a mirror on my bed facing my door.
YOU’LL NEVER GET ME.
stupid damm ninjas…
Geez, this scared the crap out of me. I’m at my grandfather’s, sitting in the living room (which has not only two entrances, but also glass french doors leading to the back yard), and this house is huge, and I’m home alone. Ahh. My tummy hurts now. D:
i grave dig-it.
yummy pasta
Woah my door is slightly ajar…I had thought I’d shut it…I had thought I’d be able to notice anything that moves in and out due to it being just 2 yards away from me…
Nice one!
4 out of 5 twists of the Parmesan Cheese Grinder!
Would have gotten 5 twists but it was a bit stilted in writing style and had typos and missing words that are inexcusable in such a small serving of pasta.
I didn’t wanna look behind me. :[
but then WHO WAS MOVING
….I don’t even know what the hell kind of video they’re talking about. Plus, my dad is dancing around singing Ugly Kid Joe while I read this, so any possible creepy man/girl/shit/thaaang probably ran for its life about ten seconds ago.
Haha, I actully looked. I’m such a freaking loser, lol.
some t.v.’s on in another room, i look around and see oprah.
my worst fears are officially confirmed.
but really, that freaked me out. D: i’m going into a well-lit room now.
This one actually made me laugh. Depending on what the author was going for, not necessarily a good thing.
Holy shit.
The cat was in my room, and when I got to the end of the pasta, she started to move.
I shat bricks.
Fooken awesome!
Aww c’mon! This is just a trick! There’s nobody in my doorwa- O SHI
But I live in a box. . .
Earlier I was saying, that I have had trouble finding any pasta creepy. WELL FUDGE THAT.
“All the people that say they’re facing their doors… That’s the point, you didn’t even notice the door opening and some one coming in because your focused on something else.”
It doesn’t make it any better, if, like me, you have your bedroom door behind you so that you can see the reflection of it on the screen, thanks to black creepypasta.com outlook. It really doesn’t.
i lock my rooooom
retard
Door is closed. Creepy fail.
/disappointment.
THIS is what I’m talking about. One paragraph long, old-school pasta that’s plausible, well-written, and capable of causing me to shit bri/x/ and sleep with the lights on.
I completely agree with Candleja?
BUT WHO WAS MOONWALKING BEAR?
Haha fuck hella looked behind me man.
Get out of here Zombie Ghost.
2 flaws for me when I read that:
1) I had full view of my closed door the whole time I was reading it
2) My back was against the wall so you wouldn’t have been able to get behind me
At least I’m at school. OMG TEACHER EaTING MY INARDS
Srsly made my heart drop into my stomach. SCARY SHT RIGHT THERE
My rabbit tends to do that. It then hides under my bed and begins stomping victoriously.
The only place in my room I can’t see right now is where Candlejack is hid-
I SHAT BRIX
JESUS CHRIST, when i reached the end i couldnt help but jump and look at my door.
you got me
Shit.
I feel very violated :’(
@Paddymew
Geez, why do all you guys mention Candlejack when you kn
Aaaaaw, man…too bad I’m at the office.
I got scared. My door was on the side of me so I could not watch it. My heart stopped for a second.
HA! I’m not even in my room you fucking thieving nigger! And I’m getting my 44. Blackhawk out to blow your ass away!
Delicious pasta. ;D
… -looks around- DDD:
Fucking shat brix.
As somebody laying in their bed in the bedroom facing the far wall with only minimal peripheral vision connecting me to the bedroom door, and it being 5 in the morning; I can say that I honestly got a wave a goosebumps that traveled up and down my body.
Weird.
They work by making you focus on one thing then putting something similar, but different, in front of you. I’d've heard the door open and promptly beat the person to death with the nearest blunt object.
I just froze still for 3 minutes.
I still have my eyes glued to the computer
lmao.
Very nice. Short and got right to the point.
As for all the comments that said, “Well, i’m not in my room” or “My door was closed”, it doesn’t make this pasta any less awesome than it is. You just have to appreciate the idea behind it.
“FUUUUUUUUUUUUUUU-”
I’m right next to my door, and tired, I leaned in to read it cuz my eyesight is bad as it is, let alone when I’m tired. I have an ENTIRE room behind me, door behind me, door to my left. *fucking shiver*
cool then we can have violent, bloody sex
Nice try but that has only happened to me once, and the part about the room…impossible. Then again I do it all the time to people … 0_o
I’m behind you right now.
Oh, and Candlejack.
JOKES ON YOU IM AT SCHOOL.
Dude are you Candleja
Too bad i can see my door’s reflection from the computer screen.
If I couldn’t…I wouldn’t be here posting it with my pants clean
WHAT THE BLOODY HELL
No sleep for me D:
I love this one. Gets me everytime.
holy jesus i actually looked up at my door all wide-eyed when i read that.
I don’t see you there…
Oh. That’s what it was supposed to be? That explains what was up with the last scene in the suicidal mickey vid.
I thought the vid maker made a mistake.
I jumped on the inside. Not scary but clever. I’ll go for clever.
oh hi who wrote this paragraph
i wonder how did you came all the way here?
Short, sweet, and to the point. I remember the first time I read this.
Fear the Darkness
-Nex
WHO WAS STALKER?!
well,
i guess i just lost.
THE GAME
My insides just turned. I literally got goosebumps, shivers and then with gigantic wide eyes looked at my door and behind me. Almost impossible to write this since I have to keep eyes on door.
Short and fantastic.
10/10
why is my closet door open?
Have to say, best one i’ve read, although i haven’t read many.
I read this after i watched toy story, so being scared kinda hit me hard!
@mow
NOooooooooooooooooooooooooo…..
For some reason when i read the part where you say i didn’t notice you come in i only picture a kind of angled camera view of the grudge standing there.
Creepy i just read this with my friend in her room
I honestly checked behind me just then.
Do not want.
Great story, love this one.
Ha, I’m in the car!
…*looks behind my seat*
FFFFUUUUUUUUUUUUU-
This is the creepiest pasta I have ever read. You, sir, are a genius.
Now s’cuse me while I check around for any intruders.
While i was reading that my mom walked in my room and put something on my dresser. i didn’t notice until she closed the door. *dies*
my doors closed and im facing it ain\’t no way you getting in here
But I’m in my living room.
Oh sh–
This one freaked me out.
Man fuck you, my washing machine decided to give a nice resounding CLANG! when I read the last line, causing me to basically shit brix.
Short, sweet, and just creepy enough. Delicious pasta.
This probably would’ve fucked me up had I not been sitting on my bed with my laptop with my door in plain sight. Lol
are you the maid?