The first four days Lachlan had been excited. The fifth day, that Friday that he came back from primary school with dirt on his knees, he was not excited. He was euphoric.
I was in my office, writing the final formulaic words of another research proposal.
“Daaad!”
“Hey!”
“Dad! Dad! Dad!”
“Oh wow, someone is happy. Enjoyed school?”
“School is awesome!”
“That’s great!”
“And I have loads of friends!”
“Of course you do.”
“Look!”
He stretched his small, dirty hand towards me.
“You cut yourself?”
“No.”
“That looks like a cut.”
“It’s a talesman.”
“A what?”
“A tales-man.”
“A talisman?”
Lachlan grinned.
“A tal-is-man.”
“Oh.”
“You like it?”
I pulled his hand closer.
A perfect circle, clearly cut into his skin, with a small chequer in the center. The chequer was a solid red. Not just a cut; the solid red of his flesh.
“Did you do that on purpose?”
“No. My friends did it.”
“Your friends did it?”
“Yeah.”
“And they did that on purpose?”
“Of course. They all have one too.”
“Lachlan, are those friends older than you?”
Lachlan nodded.
He took a step back, but I still held his hand.
“And do they go to your school?”
He nodded.
“And do you know their names?”
He shook his head.
“You don’t know their names?”
“They don’t have names.”
“Oh,” I said. “But they are in your class?”
“No.”
“But in your school.”
He nodded.
“And when did they cut you?”
“In the first break.”
“The first break?”
Lachlan smiled.
“They gave it only to me and Nichole.”
I took my mobile phone from the table.
“Lachlan, how old were they?”
“I don’t know.”
“How tall were they?”
“Smaller than you.”
“Smaller?”
“Just a bit.”
“And what did they look like?”
“I don’t know. Really white.”
“White?”
“Really white.”
My fingers were scrolling through the list of numbers.
“And where did they do that?”
“On my hand.”
“No, I mean, where were you when they put it on your hand.”
Lachlan paused. He bent his head to the side.
“Where were you, Lachlan?”
“Downstairs,” he said.
“Downstairs? Like in the basement?”
“No,” he said. “More downstairs.”
My index finger tapped the name of the class teacher. I asked him whethere there was a girl called Nichole in Lachlan’s class. The teacher said yes. I told him to come to school and to call the parents of that girl.
Then I called the police.
When we arrived Ms. Bullen was already arguing with the police.
“That would never happen,” she said. “Older kids and adults can’t just go in here.”
We stepped towards them. Lachlan was scared. I lifted him up, pulled the band-aid off and showed his hand to Ms. Bullen and the officers.
“Lachlan said some kids did this.”
“My god,” said Ms. Bullen.
“No,” said Lachlan. “Those were my friends!”
One of the officers bent towards Lachlan’s hand.
“Your friends?” he asked.
“Yeah. They showed me the school. And Nichole too!”
“And they were older than you?” asked the officer.
Lachlan nodded.
“And you are sure they were in the school?”
He nodded again.
A mother with a young blond-haired girl stepped through the door.
Lachlan waved and tried to get to the ground.
“Nichole! Nichole! Show them too!”
Nichole stopped walking. She took a few steps back, until her mother lifted her up.
“Show what?” asked the mother.
“The ta-lis-man,” said Lachlan.
Nichole shook her head.
“What talisman?” asked her mother.
Lachlan grinned.
“On her hand! I have one too!”
The color of Ms. Bullen’s face seemed to disappear in the small red wound on her daughter’s left hand. A circle surrounded that square wound too.
The police asked the janitor to safe all security tapes. Then they asked Lachlan and Nichole to show them where they had met their ‘friends’.
“Downstairs,” said Lachlan.
“In the basement,” said Nichole.
“Not the basement,” said Lachlan. “It was more downstairs.”
“It wasn’t,” said Nichole.
“But it was more black,” said Lachlan.
Nichole nodded.
“It was really dark,” she said. “But it didn’t hurt.”
The two pulled us to a flight of stairs at the back of the school.
“Those stairs are usually locked,” said Ms. Bullen.
The officers called for backup. Then they went downstairs with us. Carefully, with Lachlan holding my hand and Nichole holding that of her mother, we stepped down into the darkness. Ms. Bullen found the lightswitch and the bare corridor blinked to life with bright white light.
Shut doors to each side. One after the other the officers opened the doors, flipped the lightswitches on and searched the rooms. A second pair of officers reached us after half the rooms had been discovered as empty.
“It’s not here,” said Lachlan. “Too much light here.”
“And it’s too cold,” said Nichole.
“Yeah,” said Lachlan “It was really warm.”
“They were really scary.”
“No,” said Lachlan. “They were really nice.”
“They were really white.”
Lachlan nodded.
“And,” Nichole said. “They didn’t have noses.”
“They had noses!” said Lachlan. “Just flat ones.”
“And they didn’t have a mouth,” said Nichole.
“No,” said Lachlan. “That was just their masks.”
“They wore masks?” asked the officer.
Lachlan smiled.
“Really cool ones.”
“Cool?”
“Scary,” said Nichole.
“Like doctors,” said Lachlan. “But bigger and gray.”
“And you weren’t scared of them?” I asked.
Lachlan shook his head.
“They are our friends. They started school with us!”
“They’ve been here the whole time?” asked an officer.
Nichole and Lachlan both nodded.
When all the rooms had been checked the police interviewed Lachlan and Nichole again.
There were three or four of them. White skin; flat noses; large gray masks that looked like microphones. Large eyes or sunglasses.
They had played with Nichole and Lachlan during the week, but not with any other kids.
They had asked them to come to the basement and then, so said Lachlan, it was all black and the stairs suddenly ended and in the darkness he only saw the white of their bodies.
Then the men gave them talismans.
“It was really quick,” said Nichole. “It didn’t hurt.”
Then the light returned and they were told to run up the stairs.
That night Lachlan fell asleep in my bed, with my arms wrapped around him. He wasn’t scared. It was for me, not for him. I locked all the windows and doors; checked the attic and every single wardrobe. And still, even with my bedroom door locked, I still could not sleep except with him in my arms.
At 2:40am I woke up and there was nothing in my arms. And he was not under the bed or in the wardrobe. And the bedroom door was still locked from inside.
I called the police. Then I called Nichole’s mother and she sounded as panicked as I was.
I ran through the whole house and garden, screaming his name.
Then I got the call.
Nichole’s mother.
“I can’t believe it,” she said. “He’s here.”
Nearly eight miles away. Yet he was there, in a locked bedroom, sleeping in the top bunk next to Nichole while Nichole’s sister slept below.
The police searched each of our houses but they didn’t find anything suspicious. I took him out of that school and stayed with him in the same room at most times. At night I tied his arm to mine with a silk cloth. Then I wrapped my arms around him.
For two nights it went fine.
The third night I woke up from a girl’s screams.
Nichole, squeezed between Lachlan and me.
The fourth night I woke up and he was gone.
I called Nichole’s mother and she ran to Nichole’s bedroom.
I heard her slam the key in the door.
She called Nichole’s name, but Nichole’s voice didn’t answer. Only her sister.
That moment we both, I think, had a nervous breakdown. I ran through the house again, screaming, and at the other end of the line she and Nichole’s older sister seemed to do the same.
Then there were screams on the line.
Then there was quiet.
The police arrived long before me.
They found the door locked and rang the bell loud and long.
Nichole’s mother answered. She said she had been in bed. She allowed the police to come inside.
Together they went to the girls’ bedroom.
They found Nichole’s sister sleeping on the bottom bunk.
They found Nichole and Lachlan on the top bunk.
Nichole’s mother said she didn’t know how he had come in.
Nichole’s mother also didn’t know how she had gotten the strange cut on her hand. And why her daughters and Lachlan all had the same.
She didn’t remember going to the school.
She didn’t remember meeting me.
It’s the fifth night now.
Lachlan is right next to me, his arm tied to mine.
His eyes are closed and his breathing is calm.
But I can’t sleep.
I sit with my back against the wall and my arm wrapped around him and my laptop on my lap and a camera at the other end of the room.
I can’t sleep because I wonder why that wound on his hand doesn’t heal.
I can’t sleep because I wonder whether he will disappear and whether he will be back.
And I can’t sleep because I wonder whether I will remember that something is wrong.
Credit To – Anton Scheller
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This couldve bee. So good but then itI just ended .ot making to much sense. Such a shame when this happens. Ugh
I love alien abduction stories. This one seemed to have a very demonic undertone to it, though. “More downstairs” sounds like Hell. I like how it leaves open the possibility that it was either aliens or demons and doesn’t confirm either. The etching on their hands could also be some demonic symbol. Or maybe I just watch too much Supernatural.
I liked this one, but I couldn’t decide if the “freinds” were supernatural or not. The dark and warm kind of sounds like they’re close to hell but the description of their faces sounds like gas masks. Great story, 9/10
I thought the same thing about it being aliens too. Kinda shocked nobody else has said anything about it.
i was kind of disappointed that we didn’t get to find out what was going on. it was an interesting and good story just felt like there wasn’t really an ending.
I want to comment on this story, but I can’t remember what I was going to say, and now there’s a weird cut on my hand and my calendar says it’s Tuesday. Wasn’t it just Sunday? What’s happening? This can’t be r
where am i
This was so awesome but I wish the author didn’t end it so suddenly. I wouldve loved to know what the talismans stood for and who the other kids were
Rating 4/10 – below average
Could have been way better, but the lack of any sort of explanation and a real ending made me not enjoy it.
I feel as if i want more of this story… very good though.
noooO! why does it have to be a cliffhanger? damn it
I really thought you have the core of an excellent story here. It grabbed my attention and held it. The only problem, as others have stated, is it was ended too quickly… it is missing some info and it felt almost truncated (what are those white figures? What is the purpose of the talisman ?) We want more….
for those of you in the comments saying “uh…it’s not that good” if you were a parent this would be horiffying. imagine the thing you cared about most in the world was in constant danger and there was nothing you could do to stop it
This was fantastic. The innocence of the children was portrayed very well, and I think it added to the Creepiness. Well done!
Great story. It’s not like sleeping is totally necessary
Cool. The mystery, the new unknown figures, the shady purpose of marking. Just cool. it’s a 10.
Holy Crap… This is incredibly trippy and very creepy.
I love it.
Awesome story, where are you guys from? I can’t think of it, but I’m sure I’ve heard the name Lachlan before. What nationality is it?
It’s not a terribly rare name: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Lachlan_(name)
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Nice try cat we all know it’s you!
Why was this rated 8/10
There’s like a lot of dialogue which makes my eyes hurt when I read it.
There’s more dialogue than actual story description.
Creepy who were those “friends” whats a Talisman ?
Are you pretending to be dense ?
Good story, but I wanted more from the ending. :)
I liked your style, but this is incomplete. And not creepy at all. Overall not too bad but needs more story. Its already so short why didn’t you just finish it? Im all for the multiple installations, but this isn’t even part one, its like part half of one.
Class story
I couldn’t help but think that English wasn’t the author’s primary language. Not an insult – just obseravation. It felt…broken. Like too much story trying to fit through too small a hole.
I completely understand what you mean! I do that to a lot of my stories though, and English is my primary language. In a way maybe the author was just very over eager at his truly excellent idea for a story.
Wtf is a talisman???
http://lmgtfy.com/?q=talisman
Weird how you searched that for us, but awesome.
My mind is regularly blown by some of the words that confuse readers. I remember making fake “talismans” out of modeling clay when I was 7 years old or so.
The LMGTFY usage is just a shade sarcastic, though. It takes less time/effort to google “talisman” than it does to post a question and wait for an answer.