• chenmo

    i really liked it a 8/10 from me

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    Rating: +7 (from 7 votes)
  • PastYourBedTime

    There are two factors that make a creepypasta good. Fear, and compellsion. This had neither. I felt nothing for the main character (presuming it was you). The dreams weren’t that good, or original. And I have neevr heard anyone use that phrase unless they were quoting the movie “Nightmare on Elm. Street”. 5/10

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    Rating: +8 (from 10 votes)
  • Steph

    It was written well but it wasn’t scary or anything. Not to mention dying in your dreams is actually pretty common and they don’t even have to be nightmares. I die in my dreams at least once every few months. 6/10 for your style of writing

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  • blah

    I was laughing I couldn’t finish reading it, it was just too damn funny

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    Rating: +1 (from 7 votes)
  • Niima

    It kinda got annoying the way you put some info about four times in the same paragraph. Such as “My scientific mind!”, “My mind is very scientific.” “My mind has scientific thoughts!” Or “This is why I don’t believe!” “I don’t believe because of that!” You lose the reader at the beginning and then the story becomes iffy. The dreams need a little work and polish, but overall the ending wasn’t the worst I’ve seen by far. Rewrite is in order please :)

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    Rating: +11 (from 11 votes)
  • Slenderho

    I don’t like your writing style at all. The pasta was a decent length, had a semi-interesting story, but was in my opinion repetitive.

    3/10, would not bang.

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  • DawnsonDalight3

    It was a pretty nice story, And I liked it because i scare easy. I love to know Other people’s stories, As im nosy :) 8/10, I could have used a little thrill ;D

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  • L Lawiet

    Nice pasta but the ending didn’t make any sence to me

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  • Pyromania

    Wow.. Your dreams suck.
    I’ve died in a dream before and all that happened was that i seemed to re-load like a game character in a place i’d been in before. I died in my dream by a rollarcoaster falling on top of me and crushing my windpipe.

    It didn’t scare me.

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  • Forrest

    Pretty repetitive, but I liked the bit with the spine.

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    • William

      I agree, the part with the spine uses great imagery to make the reader shudder.

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  • http://hay16mc.tumblr.com/ Hayley

    Is it bad that I read this pasta with Sheldon Cooper’s voice?

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    Rating: +10 (from 10 votes)
  • http://dirjel.deviantart.com Dirjel

    HOLY SHIT GUYS, MY SCIENTIFIC MIND HAS DEDUCED THAT READING CREEPY PASTA GIVES YOU NIGHTMARES!

    Story wasn’t very compelling, but still above-average. 5.5/10.

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  • Privyet

    Only heard the “if you die in your dreams you die in real life” line on a Freddy Kruger movie and the matrix.

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  • Anonymous

    Meh, I like the plot but the exicution was rusty. Your dreams had too much detail (like the whole background of the futureistic alien obduction, how would dream you know this stuff?).

    I also wish you would have played up the reoccuring dream a bit more. I have a nightmare mall I used to wind up in 2/3 times a year when I was younger. You started to capture that creepyness but then the story ended the way we all knew it would.

    I would enjoy munching on this pasta after it has had time to simmer a bit.

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  • 151rby

    This pasta suffers from two things. One, it’s been done dozens of times before, someone has a nightmare, wakes up, and finds physical evidence of the nightmare. Two, it is poorly written, and the narrator is not very convincing as a “scientific” person.

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    Rating: +3 (from 3 votes)
  • Turd

    “This time, however, I never felt that unnnerved this time. Since I began doing this experiment, I have gradually become less and less freaked out by horror films and creepypasta. So falling asleep was easy this time…”

    You should include the phrase ‘THIS TIME’ a few more times.

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  • Bob

    Why am I reading EVERY CREEPYPASTA WHEN I AM ONLY 11?! Ps I read smile dog and didn’t get any nightmares!

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  • http://creepypasta.com courtney

    welllll this was somethin!

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  • Slendermen

    Not bad.The imposter could of done better.

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    Rating: +2 (from 2 votes)
  • pang

    proll happened

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  • The Pasta Review

    Well, it was good but I felt like you copied Nightmare on Elmstreet. 5/10 for lack of originality.

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  • Dun-dun-dun

    Oh God!!!! This story is like a vaccuum cleaner, it sucks!!!

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  • The one who shall restore peace and order

    There’s a truth to this. The human mind processes things, but if a dream or vision is lucid enough, the body attacks itself regardless if its you still. Thus if you get a burn in a lucid dream, the body makes it look like a burn.

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  • fatma

    is this story true?

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  • Pinkamina

    It sucks. Sorry man, it just seems like a rip-off of Freddy and a bunch other crap thrown together. I had more fun eating a cupcake made out of a changeling than reading this.

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