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Bottle



Estimated reading time — 2 minutes

My damnation came in the form of a bottle.

No, not like that.

When I was a child my best friend lived next to a little junkyard. Great place for a kid to hang out, a junkyard. Full of mystery and exciting discoveries, and if you find anything nice nobody minds if you take it, except your parents, obviously. Well, not my friend’s mom. Most of their bowls and plates came from that junkyard. But anyway.

One day a bunch of us were hanging out, dismantling a car. Some of us might have been interested in the parts, I just thought breaking stuff was great. When we’d got the engine strewn everywhere we set to work on the interior. Under one of the seats was a little glass bottle, full of some green, bubbly liquid.

Curiosity trumped hygiene in those days. I uncorked it and sniffed it. The smell was pleasant, minty, a little floral. One kid, Jackie, dared me to drink it. It was a double-dog dare. I had to.

The taste was also pleasant, and it warmed me on the way down. My body was filled with a strange, pleasant tingling. Nothing else happened, not until that night.

First effect, I couldn’t sleep. I haven’t needed sleep since. It’s all right. I get a lot done.

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Second effect, a month later. I started to cough things up. I was playing alone in the woods and I hacked up blood. Then there were chunks in the blood. Then I was puking. The entirety of my coiled long intestine came snaking up as I sat there quivering, tears on my cheeks, struggling to breathe, literally puking my guts up. My mouth seemed to unhinge like a snake’s to accommodate my lungs. My heart was on my sleeve. The bloodstain would never have come out if I hadn’t abandoned the clothes I was wearing. The police searched frantically for a missing person, but never found a thing.

I wasn’t empty when I finished, though. New organs built up inside me. I could feel them, I could see them when I closed my eyes, nameless lumps and spirals springing out of nothing.

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Third effect. Two months later. I began to crave the water. I can’t possibly describe the feeling of thirsty skin, but it was a desperate thirst. I left my parents’ house one night and walked and walked until I came to a swamp. I moved in. The murky, bug-filled waters feel like home now, as they did all those years ago. I sit under the water, watching the fish and salamanders get eaten by herons, looking at the surface waiting for my prey.

I’m sure you know what the fourth effect was. I’m typing this on the cell-phone of my latest victim. She was delicious. She smelled like fresh melons.


Credited to mngamojemo.

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125 thoughts on “Bottle”

  1. Not that great, not the worst but nothing special, it seems more like something a mildly competent writer would think up and create in one night, 6/10.

  2. You,would have to first puke your stomach and small intestine and some other stuff before the long intestine. Due to it not being able to travel through the small intestine to the stomach and up the esophagus might have been better if you said he puked his small intestine out.

  3. so basically he turned into a fish and started to eat people um… ok anyway pretty good story i liked the part where he started to puke up his guts and he mentioned writing the story on his victim’s cellphone:)

    overall delicious pasta:D

  4. Magical mouthwash that has 100grams of sugar in it and makes you breath underwater. Looks to me like an Oblivon potion you can drink.

  5. the part where he writes the entire story on some chick’s cell was kinda unrealistic though. but overall i liked the descriptions, especially when he puked up organs was pretty graphic.

    for some reason i really liked it though, smooth reading.

  6. Shiver Down Your Spine

    I’m not about to go through all the comments, but did no one else think about the fact that cellphones have a symbol limit with texts? A hundred-something, I don’t know I never text. I’m pretty sure this exceeds the max though.

    Story fails. Ending fails harder.

  7. from what I can understand, he was part sea cucumber, considering that he could puke out his guts and grow new ones, a defense mechanism of the sea cucumber

  8. +1 to whoever said “he drank gatorade”

    ps….why would a car in a junkyard have that bottle? or is that part of the creepyosity?

  9. reminds me of an RL Stine story i read ages back
    i think instead he ate a fruit, forgot about the details, but I do remember the narrator turning into some sea creature

  10. The vomiting of the internal organs reminded me of severe radiation sickness. Very good. 7/10.

    Fear the Darkness

    -Nex

  11. Why do people keep saying he’s an alligator now? Maybe he’s a fucking crocodile?!

    But seriously, I never saw him as becoming an alligator. Just a swamp-lurking cannibal.

  12. Why are the quality of comments on this site sub-Youtube quality? “OMG that suxs” “I could do better than that” “This is the worst -80000/10”

    ARGH! New creepypasta: everyone who posts stupid comments is a real, living person. They talk and think exactly as you would expect from reading their comments. Most of them were able to acquire jobs. Some of them will reproduce and raise children.

  13. Ever drink Bailey’s from a shoe? Wanna go to a club where people wee on each other? I’m gonna hurt you. I like you. What do ya’ think of me?

  14. Captain Oblivion

    Very well written, but after the gut-puking I felt like it ran out of steam. The ending didn’t really top the horror of a person puking up their own intestines, I think.

  15. The timing doesn’t make sense. Since when do you say, “when I was a kid i drank some shit”, then say “two months later i saw other effects” and say “after that now i’m typing on a cell phone”.

    THEN WHO WAS KID?

  16. -__________- That was HORRIBLE. I was bored, and thought that the story was completely pointless. Not very exciting. -5/10

  17. Delicious pasta & nicely written on top of it. Although the concept is kind of over-used, wait a minute! I think i smell a melon human walking by -nom nom nom-~

  18. And the fourth effect was the ability to write stuff on a cellphone O_o
    nice story… strange ending… seemed a little rushed from the middle of the story

  19. Remember when it wasn’t necessarry for a story to explain how and with what it is written? I like the alligator idea, but alligators can’t type with cell phones.

    To the pasta itself, I don’t know. Every pasta I’ve recently read has left me kinda cold, and empty too. I’ve already read the creepiest pasta and after that, am not afraid of less creepy ones even though it’s rainy day and I’m currently alone. And been reading creepypasta/ghost stories since Tuesday.

    Well, this pasta was creepiest to this point, but still missed that “something”. It’s a boring life if creepypasta doesn’t creep.

  20. HEY KIDS;

    NEVER DRINK FROM BOTTLE YOU FIND IN CAR SEATS, K?

    And when he said “He left his parents” means they accepted him even though he had no jaw and no organs?

    WTF?!?

  21. Reminded me of the creature Dagon. Not very well written, kind of predictable. I expected more and got less.
    Waiter, I wish to return my pasta.

  22. i am a heron. i haev a long neck and i pick fish out of the water w/ my beak. if you dont repost this comment on 10 other pages i will fly into your kitchen tonight and make a mess of your pots and pans

  23. Different Pasta, Didn’t quite get it though? ^o)
    Man fish? Vampire? Alligator…Like the recycling advert says…..’The possibilities are endless’ xD

  24. “She smelled like Fresh Melons” seems like a reference to a poem from Grim Fandango. Really nice reference, if it is.

  25. hot damn, i liked this. can’t say it was too creepy, but it made me chuckle. the voice really had character to it.

  26. This is pretty horrid stuff and not in a good way. Boring, poorly constructed cliches and horrible writing skills. I would suggest the author stop writing and do something they’re better at… like sucking dick.

  27. I’m surprised nobody said anything about this yet…
    “watching the fish and salamanders get eaten by herons”

    i am a heron

  28. Lovely pasta if I do say so myself. I rather enjoyed the humanity/monstrosity of the author until the end describing her scent. Something about that just gets me in a pasta. My compliments to the chef.

  29. Total nostalgia trip from the swamp-man ending. Overall nothing spectacular but it made for a good read.

  30. Well this was a nice pasta, but I couldn’t help it, that this had the reference to some old classic horror movie with a swamp monster snatching up a woman.

    :/

  31. Eh, it was a good idea but I think it could’ve been written a little bit better. It’s more entertaining than the last batch of pastas, at any rate.

  32. ….alligators don’t have thumbs, people… *facepalm*

    Also, crocs don’t “drink” through their skin. They’re not amphibians. gb2/1stgradescienceclass

  33. Started strong, but got worse and worse. I thought I was in for something interesting, but ended up with a pretty bland pasta.

  34. I liked it, but the ending was predictable. I think it would be cooler if they didn’t just start eating people, but started becoming more and more swampish.

  35. I didn’t expect to see this on the mainsite. But then again, silly me, DAY OF ALL THE BLOOD got posted here.

  36. this was dumb…

    who drinks stuff you fins under old van seats in junkyards anyway?
    it should have turned him into something worse & scarier.
    THEN it would be a good story.

  37. Feaster of Fear

    Hrm…..don’t know if want. I live in the swamps, so I suppose my skin wouldn’t be thirsty, but on the other hand, I love to eat alligator………so would I love to eat me?

    On the whole, I’d say this one could use just a bit more creepy. After all, gore/vomit/blood all make wonderful additions to any creepy recipe, but don’t try to use them as a substitute FOR the creepy. Other than that, though, it was executed rather well, and it kept me interested.

  38. Not really feeling this one. It started off cool enough. I mean, children wandering around unattended in a junk yard? It starts with some potential. I’m not a huge fan of the execution though…

  39. Why does this remind me of one of those old movies?
    I’m probably saying the name when I say what it’s about but, the thing that came from the swamp or something.
    Maybe this shows how he became such a monster?

  40. The author needs to write with less choppy sentences, and stick more to the plot (who cares about the friend’s mom?).
    Good concept, though.

  41. LOL,I was just about to ask “THEN WHO WAS NARRATOR?” Then I read the last paragraph and lol’d. So it’s a murderous man-fish that has opposable thumbs and posts creepypasta through a cellphone. Awesome.

    The puking up your guts and complete body restructuing part made me think of Extremis. Not bad at all,pretty well written.

  42. LOL,I was just about to ask “THEN WHO WAS THE NARRATOR?” Then I read the last sentence and lol’d.

    The puking up organs and complete body restructuring part made me think Extremis. Not bad,pretty well written.

  43. I like the concept. It’s much better than some of the other things that have been posted on here as of late. The ending was kinda blah. I like pastas that give me a jolt when I read the ending, a kind of unexpected twist. Sadly this was lacking in that department. It wasn’t a bad story, but not an amazingly good one either. I saw the ending coming a mile away. I’d say it’s just an average pasta. The writer definatley has potential though.

    Excuse my spelling mistakes please, I’m not the best in that department.

  44. so the narrator drank some green shit from a bottle then turned into an alligator. cool story bro.

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